Welcome back! It’s Six Sentence Sunday, it’s the next installation of Flight, and the fight is on. Get yer popcorn and join Bartholomew for a rooftop view.
If you’re new or wanna review, the story starts here.
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Bartholomew leaned out over the roofline like a gargoyle, smoke swirling around him and away. A small smile tugged up the right corner of his lip. He hadn’t missed how the little girl had twisted Mary’s name into a curse.
Neither had Mary and the larger girl’s fist came around to smash Tilly.
The blow struck her cheek and she crashed into the red brick wall. She landed in a slimy puddle and her head struck the cobblestones with a crack.
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Wooo! *munch munch* I love the observer perspective of a fight.
Awesome six!
the sound, yes, and the other details that aren’t the fight are what make it work. that’s the stuff that our memory salts away while we’re coping with the crisis.
I liked the relationship to the gargoyle, was instantly able to image how he was positioned. Nice 6.
Eep! Nice six.
Beautiful writing, all of it. Looking forward to when I come here and find something for sale
Thank you, Skye! That’s high praise, indeed!
Well written. I sure want to know what happens next! Good work.
Poor Tilly! Will this guy help her? Great descriptions too, very visual
Wow, great six!
Great fight scene.
Great fight scene, but poor Tilly! This is such a great story, Monica. I can’t wait to see what happens next. Thanks for another lovely six!
This is deliciously gruesome! Love the crack. I think I actually winced!
Darn! I felt certain it wouldn’t come to this.
Great six, Monica.
I am really enjoying this story. You have nailed the atmosphere, the tension and painted a wonderfully vivid picture. Thank you.
Lovely. I really liked it! Very visual.
Great scene, Monica–as always
Cleanly done, action-focused without distracting detail. Look forward to more!
So visceral. You know how to punch up a fight scene!
Ow! Great six!
Oh, poor Tilly! Hope that crack isn’t fatal. Love how he leaned over “like a gargoyle.”
Nasty fight! Well written, I’m enjoying seeing it through his eyes.
Ooo, this is getting dirty! I wonder how Tilly will respond?