Hi friends! Welcome back for another Six Sentence Sunday installment from Flight, my paranormal short. Last week we left Bartholomew on the roof and poor, little Tilly sprawled on the alley’s cobblestones. Will she stay down?
If you’re new to this story, and want to read from the beginning, you’ll find the first installment here.
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Mary smirked as she yanked the little, bundled shawl from Tilly’s arms. “Now it’s fer me.” She spat on her victim then marched back to the waiting boys.
Bartholomew’s fists clenched as Mary revealed a small heel of bread from the ragged shawl and doled out shares to her lackeys. Her back to her victim, the bully draped the stolen shawl over her shoulder and shoveled bread into her mouth.
Tilly rolled over, rose to her knees, and looked around.
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Love your beats, Monica. You do such a great job of drawing the reader into the scene–I can almost feel the pavement under my own knees. And, as always, you make every word count. Great job!
You really pull the reader in with this. Great job!
A wonderful six. You really drew me into the scene.
Go Tilly go! Great six!
Great six that really makes this scene come alive
Poor Tilly, great description!
Go Tilly Go! And how much longer can Bart stay on the roof and watch? Great tension!
Another great six. Your description and sense of pacing are remarkable!
Wow! High praise! Thank you, Steven.
Who doesn’t hate bullies? You’ve made Tilly someone to root for. Terrific six!
I hope Tilly beats up the bully!
Poor Tilly! What a heart-wrencher, Monica. Dang. Loved this, love this story so much.
Go Tilly, Go! Fantastic six, I could visualise the a complete picture.
Oh, I hope that bully gets her comeuppance!
Reminds me of a modern Charles Dickens piece. Good job.
So cruel! But Tilly is up again. Now I need to know what happens next!
Yikes, gives new meaning to the phrase “children can be cruel”! Very vivid scene, great work.
Great visual of something being a bully. C’mon Tilly, get up and show her you’re not a victim. I always root for the underdog.
Enjoyed your six.
From bad to worse… now I want to see what happens next.