Photo: Clara Natoli (claranatoli.blogspot.com)
Hola, and welcome back for another Six Sentence Sunday post. I’m knee-deep in html and ebook formatting this week, so forgive me if I seem a bit addled.
Thanks for all the encouraging comments on last week’s opening six from Girl Under Glass. Here are the next six from that novel.
Last week, Rachel’s dogs heard something outside her little cabin. Do you think it’s gone?
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Then the dogs lunged toward the door.
Pearl stiffened at the table, her doll’s clothes forgotten. Wide-eyed and watching me, my seven-year-old daughter knew better than to make a sound as Jack and Audie growled and paced.
I wiped my hands and grabbed the shotgun from the kitchen wall mount. At the door, I pulled up the peephole rag and scanned the yard.
A man stood by our fence—a dark man.
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Boo! Did I scare ya? 
No? Well, high-tail it over to the official Six Sunday site for links to lots of other sixers’ snippets. There’s good stuff to be read, and maybe one of them will scare the bejeezus outta ya.
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Awesome! A great follow up to the intro from last week. Great work, Monica!
Great 6 Monica! I especially loved this part “knew better than to make a sound” as it clues us in a little that this is routine and scary for them, thus amping the tension and preparing us for the next paragraph, well done!
The detail in this scene is quite impressive. Kudos! The next six could go in so many different directions. I can’t wait to learn which one you decided to take. Great six!
Fabulous world building here: the shotgun on the wall in the kitchen, the rag used for a peephole. Paints a perfect dystopian picture of the future.
Great tension! I need to know who is there!
Awesome six.
You didn’t scare me but I am definitely uneasy, and glad to see she is prepared. Is that gun loaded?
A nice lot of tension there. A dark man – that could be interpreted in lots of different ways.
grand stuff.
Always trust the dogs
Nice, crisp, active writing.
This could be good or bad. He could be dark as in complexion, dark as in hair color, dark as in dangerous, or dark as in he’s standing in the shadows and she can’t see him very well. Lots of potential for where this could be heading. I must come back next week and read more!
Wow, I love the intensity of this story thus far. Great six, and I can’t wait to read more!
Great tension filled six! Instantly grabbing
Intense! Great foreshadowing!
Not scared so much as left me with a deep sense of unease. A beautifully unsettling six!
Maybe I was a little concerned. LOL Nice Six!