Man, you guys, it’s been a hectic few weeks. I’m gonna be out-of-pocket today, too, but will do my best to make the Six Sentence Sunday rounds and respond to your comments. (Isn’t summer supposed to be relaxing?!) Thank you, all, for the wonderful feedback on last week’s post. It’s always appreciated.
Continuing with Girl Under Glass, we left Rachel and Pearl in the house, startled to see a man in their yard. Rachel’s armed with a shotgun, and she does, indeed, know how to use it.
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“Oh, Christ, there’s a Stranger inside the gate. Stay here. Stay quiet.”
Pearl nodded. She scrambled into the kitchen and retrieved the scalpel. I chambered a round and said, “Heel, dogs,” as I opened the door.
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Note: Before you guys ask, the capitalization of Stranger isn’t a typo. 
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These six sentences were too short! Love the tension in this, and am wondering what Pearl intends to do with her scalpel!
The short sentence structre here helps carry through the urgency and tension building in this six. Well written
Great immediacy in this Monica. Super stuff. Be very interested to see just who this Stranger is. And I love a woman with a shotgun.
Thanks, Kylie. Shotguns are so de rigueur for the post-apocalyptic woman, you know.
Ooh! Capitalized Stranger! And I love Pearl grabbing the scalpel
Eep! So intense! Well done!
Great suspense in so few words, Monica.
Well done.
Ohhh… leaving us on the edge of our seats, I see. That’s not very nice!
I’m not nice. Who said I was? Huh? Certainly not my characters! LOL!
Scalpels, shotguns, dogs and clambering – What’s not to love in this six? Except you’ve left us hanging. Who is that guy out there and what does he want?
You set up what looks like will be bloody scene with someone getting hurt. Good six!
Thanks, Frank, and thanks for stopping by!
Okay, I “get” why the scalpel and everything else, cuz I read your book blurb a few weeks back, but I’m curious about the title and how THAT ties into the story. Would love for you to explain that next week, if possible. This story plays like an AWESOME scifi movie, I can totally see this scene in my head as you share each snippet. Great writing. Great story.
Okay, I’m squee-ing. Really. I try to create a film-like read with my books, but you never know if it’s really working. Thank you, thank you, K.E.! (And, yes, I promise to give an explanation of the title’s symbolism next week. Thanks for asking.)
Wow, once again you show so much with so little, especially in word choices. Before I even saw your comment, I knew Stranger wasn’t a capitalization mistake and it upped the curiosity another notch, and the fact that he’s ‘inside’ the gate notched it up again (nice distinction there), and then, jeez, the girl grabs not a knife, but a scalpel!
Thank you, Angela! Such high praise, and I’m so glad you see and appreciate those small details.
Terrific job building the tension here to an almost unbearable level — nice work!
Yeah? I’m evil, I know. (Though not as evil as you, Steven. I’ll never reach your level. Nope. Never.)
Love it. Dying to know what a Stranger is. Sounds like it’s about to be dissected…
Summer and relaxing? Ha ha!
Come back next week. The confrontation will begin and more will be revealed.
Wow, lots of questions from six short sentences!!!
Questions are good! Now you have to come back….
Eeeek, that’s very tense. I’m enjoying this set up and very curious about this world and how it got that way.
So glad you like it and are wondering. More to come.
You had to stop there? LOL Need. More.
Coming! Coming!
Rachel seems to be extremely competent. Great heroine.
In answer to your question, in my experience summer is not remotely relaxing.
A scalpel, huh? Not one’s usual weapon of choice, but if she knows how to do damage with it… Of course the dogs may do a lot of the work. Good six.
Dogs — a dystopian woman’s best friend.
Scalpel? That’s interesting! I’d have to have to get that close to a Stranger to use it!
Rachel figures between the dogs and her gun, he’ll never get close enough for Pearl to need it.
Awesome scene as usual. Rachel is armed and ready. I like this woman!!
Thanks! She’s a survivor, mah Rachel.
Well, there’s nothing like tackling an intruder head on. No demure cowering here… I like it. Now I really want to know what a Stranger is… you have me curious (I am guessing alien visitor of some kind).