Hellooo, again, Sixers. Welcome back for another Six Sentence Sunday installment from the first chapter of Girl Under Glass. Last week, Rachel’s alien visitor silenced the dogs, now what?
(First speaker is Rachel.)
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“Show me your leg.”
The Ohnenran lifted his pant leg to reveal a swollen gash running the length of his shin. His calf bulged over the rim of his boot and the flesh was purple and black. How he’d managed to hobble around on that thing, I couldn’t imagine.
As he straightened, I said, “Remove your jacket, lift your shirt, empty your pockets, turn around.”
He did, and there was nothing but dirt and lint and bruises.
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Your descriptions here are wonderful. Fantastic six!
what happened to cause such injuries… that’s what nobody is asking. I demand to know
There is no way I am NOT getting that book of yours and everything else with your name on it – cups and posters! Yay, Monica!
“Show me your leg.”
Taken either IN or OUT of context, that’s a great line!
Such fabulous description. Great six!
Love the “feel” of this voice. Also love your title!
Lint and bruises. Lovely and bleak at the same time.
You rock.
Loved this book. Loved your writing in this book. Buy it people!!!!
Now, this is a situation that piques my curiosity!
I <3 this story so much! You set the tone from the very beginning!
Terrific display of caution and compassion. Rachel is a totally convincing heroine.
You masterfully make a bruise sound sexy. LOVE!!
I like her no nonsense, take charge attitude.
Amazing descriptions Monica….this gets better and better each week. I love your heroine’s strength!
Interesting that there’s nothing in his pockets…vivid description of that wound, ouch. Excellent excerpt!
Great details about the injury (maybe a little gruesome for some). I couldn’t imagine how he hobbled around on that leg either. Powerful six!
The contents of your pockets sat a lot about you… ;D Very nice!
That last line is super, tells us everything we need to know.
Very powerful six. I agree with Clare — I love how he’s gaining Rachel’s sympathy slowly but surely.
Such excellent description. I’m 41% in, and loving this so much, AND I bought it for my critique partner, too, cuz I think she’ll really get into it, too!! Great six!
This is great and I love how you detail everything. Great Six.
I’m quite fond of that final line. Such sly humor.
I love how you’re slowly evoking a sense of sympathy for the visitor. Great six
Great 6, Monica! Love your work.