Famine #42: Between Two Worlds (Weekend Writing Warriors)

Hello and welcome back for another WeWriWa post from Famine. On Monday I finished the first draft of this novel. Been letting it sit, and will dive into edits this week. Already started talking to ByteStudio Photography about cover concepts. Casting is moving forward and I’m looking into wardrobe, locations, and makeup/hair artists. So much fun! 😀 I love pulling together cover shoots.

In the meantime, I’m doling out another random scene. This one takes place on the Overland Flyer (the first transcontinental train in the U.S.).

============Sierra Nevadas

They had reached the Sierra Nevadas. Bartholomew stood upon the observation platform, smoking and watching the night go by. The mountains, glittering with frost beneath the full moon, looked like silver saw teeth cutting toward the stars. They hewed their way up through the stardust sky to cleave a line between Heaven and Earth.

Two worlds and he belonged to neither.

The door behind him opened to admit Matilde and Mrs. Henderson. “Goodness, the wind has a bite,” the governess said. “I’m reconsidering this foray, Miss Matilde; it’ll do none of us any good if you catch a chill.”


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  • Lovely imagery! <3

  • Great description, Monica.

    Awesome…just awesome post!

    “Two worlds and he belonged to neither.”

    I can hardly wait to read this one!!

  • Oh Monica, you have a way with description and so poignant is his expression of not belonging.

  • You paint such fascinating pictures. Two worlds and he belonged to neither. <–wow, what a great line.

  • daezarkian

    Fabulous description — very poetic, I love it!

  • I was waiting for a crow to start heckling him… Just sayin… 😉

    I love how you’ve described these mountains, cleaving a line between heaven and earth.

    Great job Monica 🙂

  • Great analogy with the saw.
    This line, ” to cleave a line between Heaven and Earth” reminded me of a line from a favortie TV show, “Twin Peaks.”
    “One chance out between two worlds, fire walk with me.”

  • Loved the description, could feel the cold and see the mountains! Excellent excerpt!

  • “Two worlds and he belonged to neither.” = AMAZING. Awesome excerpt!

  • This made me want to be on the train to see the mountains and feel the chilly breeze. I’m impressed that you do cover shoots.

  • I love the picture you paint.

  • siobhanmuir

    I love the description of the view and his stark contrast with it. Nicely done, Monica. 🙂

  • Great descriptive passage; especially the part about him belonging to neither world. Can just picture the scenery as well.

  • Very ethereal atmosphere and vivid scene. I like the governess’s practical reaction to an otherwise unimaginable circumstance.

  • Very nice description, puts me right in the scene and the dialogue is perfect for the time period. Good job!

  • Beautiful descriptions. I miss mountains. They’re so pretty. I feel bad for Bartholomew.