Famine #43: Jealousy (Weekend Writing Warriors)

Hello and welcome back for another Weekend Writing Warriors* snippet from Famine, my historical fantasy WIP. These randomly chosen eight sentences bring us back to Claire. She is strolling through Central Park with Nash Barnes hanging on her every word. Bartholomew is trailing them. Claire, for anyone not in the know, is Famine-incarnate, one of the Four Horsemen of the Apocalypse.

*Confession: I forgot to sign up for WeWriWa last week, but thought that I had. (Apparently, sleep deprivation is not a winning strategy.) I posted this earlier in the week, but just decided to let it roll.


file0001201698731“Do you see how the older men adore me?” She paused to smooth the front of her blue walking suit, her fingers making a languorous trek down her bust. “They are my favorites.” She looked up at Barnes then met Bartholomew’s gaze and said, “Do you know why, Barnes?”

“No, Ma’am.”

She smiled. “Because their droopy, old wives despise me. Jealousy is delicious, like sweet cream and berries.”


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  • Oooh!! Oh my Claire! “Like sweet cream and berries” – I can just picture her saying that 😀

  • Jealousy is certainly a prelude to disaster. Lol terrific snippet!!

  • Sex personified and one tough woman. Don’t cross her. Good eight.

  • Ah jealousy! The one bad apple that spoils a bunch! I like how Claire compares jealousy to sweet berries.

  • Hey Monica – thank you for sharing. The whole excerpt has turned out to be quite delicious. 🙂

  • Very nice touch to have Famine talking in terms of delicious food! Excellent excerpt!

  • So want to read this whole thing.

  • siobhanmuir

    Whoa. That’s awesome and gives such great insight to Claire’s character. Nicely done, Monica, and Happy Easter. 🙂

  • And Famine takes the old, and the children, first.

  • What a [deleted by censor]! Love the idea of the horsemen of the apocalypse as humans (or human-like). Does she ever meet up with the others for tea, or do they each have their own time appointed and don’t overlap?

  • So very clever in so very many ways. Wonderful job!

  • susanstuckey

    Definitely a creative/interesting idea of the Horseman, and very nice prose.

  • Ah…a character we might love to hate. Speaking as an old woman, you understand. LOL Awesome eight!

  • She sounds positively delicious… except for the fact that she’s one of the four riders. I love the way you used a food analogy when she is Famine, great work.

  • Nice insight into her character.

  • Nan

    Love “sweet cream and berries”–what a fantastic description! Love the mental picture!

  • Love the “droopy old wives” description and the “sweet cream and berries”. Great excerpt!

  • Wow, Monica, I’m not sure about Claire at all now. She’s very complex, and not necessarily a nice person–which makes her incredibly interesting! 🙂