Famine #46: Not From Hell (WeWriWa)

Hello, my friends! So dorko me forgot to sign up for Weekend Writing Warriors last week. It was on my calendar. The reminder came up. But, yeahhh. This weekend was scheduled for the Famine cover shoot, but that got bumped. So I’m hanging with you guys.

Anyhoo, since nasty ol’ Ewan got such a warm reception two weeks ago, I think I’ll give you another scene with him. In this one, he’s shown up uninvited at Bartholomew’s house.

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737px-Gustave_Dore_Inferno_Canto_21“—send you back to Hell,” Mrs. Henderson was saying, her voice calm and firm.

Quiet as a shadow, Bartholomew slipped through the kitchen and down the hall toward the great, curving staircase. He peered around the corner to see Ewan’s back and didn’t fail to notice the gaping hole in the ravener’s left shoulder.

The Governess stood atop the second floor landing, a steady rifle aimed at the Scot. Mr. Vernon, his nose bloodied and eye swelling, stood mid-stairs, his fists up and ready.

“I’m from Inverness, woman, not Hell,” Ewan replied.

Glass crunched beneath his feet as Bartholomew stepped into the foyer behind the ravener. “Doubtless they’re pleased to be rid of you.”

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  • haha… I like the sarcasm and the tension broken by B’s line at the end.

  • I missed this last week! I’m glad I caught it this week. Fantastic!

    I love this: ““I’m from Inverness, woman, not Hell,” Ewan replied.

    Glass crunched beneath his feet as Bartholomew stepped into the foyer behind the ravener. “Doubtless they’re pleased to be rid of you.”

    You have such a way with words. 🙂

  • Smooth and snappy writing.

  • Exciting and scary. You build tension so well.

  • I like Ewan’s reply. I agree with one of the comments above: you do have such a way with words.

  • Love the sarcasm. Reminds me of the dialogue from Firefly, which is one of my all-time favorite tv shows. Thanks for the peek!

  • That last line is a keeper. Nice, tense 8.

  • Very nice from Hell!

  • This is a captivating snippet and that last line is sublime.

  • You’re writing voice is so smooth and silky in this snippet. Excellent snippet!

  • Wow, a lot happening there, I was thoroughly intrigued – excellent excerpt, loved the language!

  • I love the tension and the humour in this piece, I’m glad you decided to post this week. I can’t wait to see what happens next.

  • Awesome last line! Very exciting snippet. 🙂

  • The thing I adore in this passage is the otherworldly (Hell as geographic location), the domestic, and the sarcastic (Inverness, also a geographic location, carefully distinguished from Hell). This is the stuff of plausible world-building because it’s all so very matter-of-fact.

  • The implication being that Inverness or Hell either one would be glad to be rid of Ewan?

  • siobhanmuir

    Say what he likes, I think they have his number. Great snippet, Monica. 🙂

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