Famine #52: An Unfair Fight (WeWriWa)

Thanks for stopping by for another eight sentences, Weekend Writing Warriors and friends. Today’s excerpt from Famine has Bartholomew in conversation with Mrs. Henderson, the governess. (She’s the first to speak.) At this point, he has begun training Matilde to fight.

Note: I’ve changed raveners to cadavers, but they’re still the same nasty, soulless bastards.


Apocalypse_vasnetsov“You are a full eleven inches taller and no less than eighty pounds heavier. You are a trained, hardened warrior. How is this possibly a fair match?”

“It’s not, and that, madame, is the point. Matilde will face cadavers taller, faster, and certainly more intent upon spilling her blood than I am.” He tapped his chest. “And she will face them in numbers. She must not fear pain—neither to receive it nor to deliver it.”


Hard times ahead for that girl.


Thanks for all the lovely comments on my previous post. I’m on set for the Famine cover shoot Sunday, so I’ll be out of the loop. (I’m ridiculously excited to get my hands on these pics!)

I hope you’ll take a moment to visit some of the other blogs that are participating in this week’s Weekend Writing Warriors hop.

  • Terrific candid statement by Bartholomew who’s no doubt the kind of expert trainer she needs. Nice work!

  • Lovely snipped. Well written. I absolutely love Bartholomew’s response. Good job.

  • danitaminnis

    Bartholomew is certainly to the point! Great snippet 🙂

  • Some hard lessons there. Bitter truth yet still tinged with concern for her well being. You have a wonderful way of expressing emotion through dialog. Thanks for sharing this talent with us every week.

  • I’m with Bartholomew. You can’t count on the enemy to be “fair”.

  • I wonder what Matilde think about that. People are trained to fear pain, how much training will she need to undo that is another question.

  • Bartholomew is right. She’ll need to be ready when she encounters cadavers.

  • ‘Teach the children well’ to prepare them for what lies ahead. Good 8!

  • Ouch. He is right, but it isn’t something I’d want to do…

  • I enjoyed the tone of this excerpt, very matter of fact even though the subject being discussed is terrifying. Terrific snippet!

  • siobhanmuir

    “Both to give it and receive it.” Interesting that he notes she might be afraid to dole it out. Nicely done, Monica. 🙂

  • Very nice, Monica. You have such tough characters! 🙂

  • Sounds like she’ll be facing a tough challenge.