Famine #61: An Unfortunate Reunion

Hello and welcome back to another eight-sentence excerpt from Famine for Weekend Writing Warriors and Snippet Sunday.

We join Bartholomew after he’s been reunited — much to his regret — with Claire after a long separation. (For those of you unfamiliar with this book, Claire is Famine-incarnate, one of the Four Horsemen of the Apocalypse.)

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Lady ClaireFamine took a deep drag on her cigarette, blew the smoke into his face, and said, “Remember all the laughs we so often shared?” Then she smirked and added, “Well, not you so much. I don’t recall you having much cheer, but we,” she gestured to her cadavers, “have had grand times.”

Claire passed the other lit cigarette to Barnes. “Cowboy, hold this.” Then she continued her monologue. “Truthfully, I’ve missed you, aesir. Nobody,” she gestured for emphasis toward his face with the lit cigarette, “I do mean nobody, can make me moan like you.”

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  • I expect Famine is a pretty straight talking girl and the thing he did to make her moan is as obvious as it sounds… but then again… perhaps not.

    • Monica Enderle Pierce

      He-he-he. She speaks with a forked tongue, don’tcha know?

  • Wow–you really painted a picture of Famine. Excellent job of delving into her character without feeling like you’re delving into her character! 🙂

    • Monica Enderle Pierce

      Thanks, love! She’s a fun character to write, and by “fun” I mean nasty, evil, treacherous, etc…

  • Nice choice for a character.
    Very clever.
    And I like her attitude.

  • “Nobody can make me moan like you.” That line made me chuckle. I like the details you’ve used to describe Famine.

  • daezarkian

    Yow, spicy! =D Fantastic character portrait!

  • ldsmith1818

    Great snippet! I love how I get a sense of her character and her relationship with him almost immediately. Well done!

  • Wow. This is amazing. I can practically smell the smoke. Fantastic excerpt!

  • sharonbuchbinder

    I’ve grown fond of Bartholomew with your snippets and am squirming for him as Famine taunts him. Gr8t!

    • Monica Enderle Pierce

      Thanks, Sharon! (You’d probably squirm more knowing that she’s sitting on his lap while gesturing with that cigarette.)

  • burnsmillie

    Wow, she is a piece of work. Love the snippet this week!

  • Wonderful as always. I especially liked how you had her gesture with the cigarette. Great use of “props.”

  • Well. our Bartholomew has had a full range of experiences thus far, hasn’t he?

    Can I just say that making Famine a smoker is a fabulous touch? So good for suppressing the appetite, you know . . . 😉

    • Monica Enderle Pierce

      Smoker, drinker, killer…hell, probably a heroine addict too given the chance. She’s a live-life-to-the-fullest kinda gal. 😀

  • Oh my. She’s not the kind of woman you’d invite home to meet momma. and her name? Last name might be Feast. You’ve done it again, Monica. We, uh, moan for more.

    • Monica Enderle Pierce

      LOL! Not the girl-next-door type, eh, Charmaine? Thanks!

  • She taunts him mercilessly, double meanings and all.

  • She’s a big tease! Fun and sensual (in its own way) snippet!

  • Whoa, don’t mess around with Ms. Famine! Really an excellent excerpt, what will Bartholomew do next???

  • siobhanmuir

    Wow, she’s as slick as a snake. Nicely done, Monica. 🙂

  • historysleuth1

    Oh God, I like her. Excellent dialogue! She is so evil. I love it!!!
    History Sleuth’s Milk Carton Murders

  • Can’t say I like her, but she’s beautifully drawn.

  • She is very funny, how could they make her moan when they are all dead anyway?

  • Interesting snippet. I’m looking forward to Bartholomew’s reaction to all of this.

  • Interesting take on famine… everybody loves a horseman, or a horseperson I guess. Thanks for sharing!

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