Famine #66: Running for His Life

Hello readers and writers! I know, I know, I’ve been a bit MIA from the blog, but notes from my editor* have kept me busy.

I’ve missed my (self-imposed) release deadline for Famine, but it’s all good. The book needed work, and I’d’ve hated it if I’d pushed it out without taking the time to make it the best possible novel I can create. However I’m in a sharing mood this week (’cause sharing is caring, ya know), so here’s eight new sentences from Famine for Weekend Writing Warriors and Snippet Sunday.

In this snippet (part of a flashback), we see eleven-year-old Bartholomew hiding in a gully from two of the Germanic invaders who’ve decimated his small village. (Note: Bartholomeus is his original, Gallo-Roman name.)


Famine by Monica PierceFrost dusted the brush and lichen around him. Silvery icicles fringed the tree branches, and an icy stream burbled between him and the rise. Could he make it across? Did he want to? A witch lived in those black woods.

There was a muttered curse, a saddle creaked then boots crunched in the snow, and one of the tribesmen growled, “I’ll gut you when I catch you, boy.”

Better the witch than the Germanii, Bartholomeus decided, and he lunged away from the tree.

“There he goes!”


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  • Intense scene. I hope he loses them in the forest. 🙂

  • Very level-headed for an 11 year-old boy in danger. The man will surely be an awesome warrior.

  • Beautiful, vivid details. A fabulous excerpt!

  • Powerful scene of the young man and explains his drive to survive and choices made along the way. Gorgeous scene. Thanks.

  • Is there a witch? Is this where he starts on his immortal(ish) journey?

    (any chance of an ARC?)

    • Monica Enderle Pierce

      Oh, there’s something worse than a witch lurking in them there woods, Sarah, but I’m not gonna tell you what. Yes, there will be ARCs, I’m just not sure when. I’ll add you to my reader/reviewer list. Thanks! 😀

  • burnsmillie

    Oh how scary. Nothing like being stuck between a rock and a hard place. Loved this glimpse into his past!

  • Fascinating glimpse into hos past…excellent excerpt!

  • Ally

    Intense! I want to know more.

  • I love the description, especially the use of sound. (And I’m glad to see you back — I’ve missed Bartholomew!) I can’t wait for this to come out .

  • siobhanmuir

    Eep! I’d take the chance too. Great snippet, Monica, and good luck with the revisions. 🙂

  • elainecsc2013

    Oww, very intense. I’d run too. At this point he doesn’t have much to lose.

  • Oh, tense snippet! He better run as fast as he can!

  • chellecordero

    Very good description of the setting – I actually felt cold as I read it. Hope the evil he doesn’t see isn’t worse than the one he knows.

  • Wonder if the witch will be an enemy or an ally.

  • He is right, better taking care of the problem at hand first instead of worrying about what is to come.

  • I missed this one! Yow–intense! I like this flashback. I want to see into Batholomew’s head at what makes him tick. A touch of vulnerability is wonderful. 🙂

    • Monica Enderle Pierce

      😀 Thanks, Teresa. Finally got this week’s posted. Bartholomew’s my onion, and I’ve yet to get through all his layers.

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