Famine #67: Like Spring Lambs

How has it been a month since I last posted? Oy. Editing sucks my time and my brain into a black hole.

Here’s another eight new sentences from Famine for Weekend Writing Warriors and Snippet Sunday. This picks up a little further in from where my last post left off. Bartholomew’s nightmarish memory of his boyhood encounter with two Germanic soldiers and an (ultimately) unfortunate intervention by the first Horseman, Famine herself.

Note: Bartholomew was called Bartholomeus as a boy. And the first speaker is Famine.

Famine by Monica Pierce============

“Are you a coward, Bartholomeus?”

“I—”

“Who died when you ran away?”

He looked down from her relentless gaze and whispered, “Everyone.”

The woman laughed. “Slaughtered like spring lambs.” She turned and strode across the creek to the bound men, pulled the short, black dagger from her belt, and looked at Bartholomeus. “Are you a Christian, boy?”

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  • Love it! Creepy atmosphere, great dialogue. You always know how to capture the attention, Monica!

    • Monica Enderle Pierce

      Thank you, sir! It’s easy to be creepy with Famine coming through my fingers. She’s delightfully unpleasant to work with. ;D

  • Nice! She sure has a lot of questions for him, yet I like her probing him.

  • Oh my! What is she going to do with that dagger?

  • asfenichel

    I love that Famine is a woman. This is a very intense little snippet. Well done!

  • Missed you. Powerful eight in a few words. Sad for the boy he once was.

  • Yup, creepy, but in a good way–makes us want to read more 🙂 Great level of tension in a pretty short space. Cool job here.

  • Looking forward to this one

  • Dark but highly intriguing! Famine is one strong character…terrific excerpt!

  • you’ve set a good scene. made me very curious

  • siobhanmuir

    Wow, the original famine was tough stuff, but sounds like a capable mentor. Nicely done, Monica.

    • Monica Enderle Pierce

      Definitely tough, but I’d call her more a manipulator than a mentor, nasty bit of work that she is. Thanks!

  • I love that Famine is female. There’s always talk about the four horsemen, but no talk about the horses themselves, and if it’s all allegorical anyway, famine could certainly be female. And she would have to be hard as nails, given what she brings. Brilliant, Monica! And great to see you back!

    • Monica Enderle Pierce

      😀 Thanks, Kate! Famine being female was just one of those “Oh! Oh, that’s cool!” moments. Don’t know where it came from, but I’m sure glad it did. And, yeah, she’s hard and nails and then some.

  • Running away doesn’t always mean cowardice. Sometimes it’s the best way to get help.

    • Monica Enderle Pierce

      Absolutely. Famine’s just being a bitch here because, well, she IS one. Mocking a scared kid is right up her alley. Poor Bartholomew.

  • I’m so glad I’ve found you again, Monica. Your writing is still awesome, and I’m very much looking forward to catching up with Bartholomew 🙂

    • Monica Enderle Pierce

      Aw! I’m glad you stopped by, too, Guilie! I’ve just been rotten about making the rounds lately. I’m hoping 2014 affords me more time to be social. 😀

  • What would have happened if he stayed, though? Wouldn’t he have just died, too. Not that you can expect a Horseman to be fair, or kind.

    • Monica Enderle Pierce

      Exactly. Staying would have meant death, but he never expected to encounter something worse than death. At this point, she’s just mocking him, sweet thing that she is. ;D Thanks for commenting!

  • Fascinating questions and answers there.

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