Six Sentence Sunday: More from Fall for Me

I’m staring at Mr. Potatohead. He’s in the middle of my family room and his ass is missing. Even more disturbing is Woody, who is passed out on the floor behind him. Mrs. Potatohead looks worried. (I would be, too, if I was her; nefarious shenanigans are afoot.)

Hmmm, that’s as good a transition as any into this week’s Six Sentence Sunday post. (Yeaaah, just pulled that outta my ass.) I’ve jumped ahead a bit in Fall for Me to introduce Claire, the antagonist. (For anyone who missed last week’s post, Matilde — the narrator — and Bartholomew are daemons.)

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She folded her arms and smirked. “And I do so doubt that mangy, little bitch standing among the trees is a queen. She’s too … weak.”

I hated her, hated that she so easily controlled Bartholomew, hated her savagery and her remorselessness. My fists clenched so tightly I felt my nails cut into my own flesh. I wanted to make Claire’s smirk a smear.

  • Mr. Potato Head and Woody hung over from a toy party? lol Wow, felt that anger, especially with that last bit.

  • Kill the bitch Kill Bill style

    • Monica Enderle Pierce

      ROFL! I can tell by your tone that I got Claire ‘right’. 😀

  • I love this six! Especially the last line. Great job!

  • Great six. The last line is fantastic.

  • Great snippet!

  • Taryn Kincaid

    Isn’t Mr. PotatoHead’s ass always missing? LOL!

    The segue from the partied-out toys to the demons in the woods made my head spin!

    • Monica Enderle Pierce

      LOL! Sorry about that, my mind was in a very strange place. (Which isn’t entirely unusual.)

  • Great snippet. Love the emotion

  • Great six! I LURVE the tension between Matilde and Claire (and the names, too)!

  • Great Six…and you reminded me how much I hate putting Mr. Potato Head’s ass back on. It’s not as easy as it looks. Why my grandson keeps tearing it off is beyond me. *lol*

  • Nice! Great depiction of the conflict and animosity.

  • Great tension! Love that last line especially.

  • Love this excerpt, I can feel her frustration and anger.


  • I smiled at the last line. Great tension in this snippet.